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Hello! My name is Natalia Tarasova. I'm twenty-three. I'm not married, and I live with my parents.
My mother name is Ludmila. She is an insurance representative. My father died six years ago. My mother married for a second time. My stepfather's name is Sergey. He has two sons who also live with us. I consider them as my brothers.
The elder brother’s name is Vladimir. He is twenty and he works as a cook. Younger one’s name is Alex. He’s nineteen and he is a student. He wants to be an auto mechanic.
I also have a grandmother. She is retired. She is eighty-three, and we all help her.
One year ago I graduated with honors from Bratsk State University as a specialist in psychology and pedagogy.
My university was not very big, but it provided a good environment for education and life for students.
At my university it was possible to learn economic, technical, and liberal arts (гуманитарные науки).
I was educated at the Pedagogical Faculty of Humanities. It was located in a separate building. Despite it wasn’t that good I liked the friendly environment within and the fact that all students knew each other.
During the university course, I worked as an announcer on the radio (если читали новости по радио, тогда radio newscaster) for a short period of time.
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Следующее предложение я бы переделал. Не совсем понятно, что вы им хотели сказать.
After graduation, I could not find a job in his specialty, so she worked as a graphic designer in the computer center of separability.
After the graduation, I cound’t find a job, so I went to work as graphics designer in the computer center.
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I liked the work, particularly its creative part. I created the business cards, brochures and other printed stuff.
This computer center was located in my town.
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He called the trunk. (что хотели этим сказать?)
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This is not a very large settlement. There are only about twelve thousand people.
The main village industry is the forest and wood processing.
The village is not far away from Bratsk (лучше from Bratsk. Все-таки city – это большой город) and is very close to the river Severobaikalsk Kirenga.
We have a very beautiful nature and excellent environment. In the village there are no large factories and hazardous industries, so we have a very clean air and a clean water in the reservoirs.
We also have a lot of places where you can relax and improve you health. For example - the mineral springs and hot springs Melt Goudzhekit.
Now I live in Bratsk again. This year I’m going to graduate from school with the certificate in "General pedagogy and history of pedagogy."
I took this decision because my dream is to work as a teacher in vocational education. Besides, for a long time I have nurtured an interest in scientific work and research in educational issues.
The major thesis under the guidance of my supervisor is to help me realize the scientific potential and accelerate me to achieve my goal (буквально – роль вашего руководителя, кроме раскрытия научного потенциала, постоянно вас пинать и подгонять J) . That will definitely help me build a successful career in the future. At least I hope so.
Ищу человека, который силен в английском
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